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篇一:《初一期末感想作文:自己长大》

人总要学会自己长大,我一定会发扬成绩、改正不足,老师、同学们请相信我!初一期末感想作文从多个方面总结了小作者的学习。初一期末感想作文:自己长大光阴似箭,时光飞逝,不知不觉中一个学期又要过去了,在这个学期中,我在德、智、体等各方面都取得了进步,所有的这一切都源自于老师、家长的督促教导和我自己的努力。为了保持和发扬成绩,总结和改正不足,现对本学期的得与失,成与败作一全面的总结,以鞭策我勇攀高峰。在德育方面:我以小学生日常行为规范的标准要求自己,尊敬老师,团结同学。三(五)班有个同学得白血病,我和我的同学都踊跃捐款【初一期末作文】,希望他能早点治好病,早点回到校园中;赵远豪的书丢了,怎么也买不着,在赵远豪一筹莫展之时,我让我爸爸在书店里的仓库里找,找到了最后一本,给了赵远豪。在学习方面:我这学期进步的不大,有时上课没有自始自终保持饱满的精神,会开小差,不积极举手发言,字写的不太好,作业质量也不太好。在体育方面:我积极、自觉地锻炼身体,上好每一堂体育课,保持良好的精神风貌。尤其是在跳高上,我得了全班最高分。在能力方面:我在一天天长大,我的个人自理能力一天比一天强。我还能帮助父母干一些简单的家务活。此外,我在课余时间学习上网,现在我可以自如的上网查找资料,学到了许多课外知识。以上这些都是我在本学期取得的成绩和存在的不足。

篇二:《初一作文修改举例》

作文修改举例 初一生活见闻感受

宾桂清

转眼间,初一生活接近尾声,一年又要过去了。在这一年里,班级的活动、同学的言行举止、个人习惯都让我有很深的感受。

(评:开头总领全文,提出了有三方面的事让“我”感受深。用语简洁,但简洁得有点寒碜,缺少一点文采。)

一、班级的活动

开学不久,学校就举行了一场《中华经典诵读》的比赛,是集体项目。在准备了两个多星期后,我们就上“战场”了。诵读完之后,评委的点评是:整齐、响亮,内容也很有意义。在我们之后,又有一个班级去演讲,而且内容和我们是一摸一样。但是,在旁白之后,没有几个人读,就算读也是乱七八糟,还有的打打闹闹。班长说:“他们真不团结!”

同样一个节目,差距怎么如此之大?原因就是他们不团结、态度不端正,俗话说:“团结就是力量。”如果他们能团结一点,也许结果大有不同吧。

二、同学的举止

那天,我在饭堂打饭,发现一个非常不好的行为——插队。我们排后面的排了大半年,也没轮到我们打饭,可高年级的大个子一来,就往前插,一下子成功地把饭打到手,让我们后面的小个子同学像哑巴吃黄连一样,有苦说不出。

俗话说:“勿以善小而不为,勿以恶小而为之。”虽然插队打饭只是一个小动作,但是对一个人这一生的修养可是有很大的影响呀!

三:个人的习惯

准备了大半学期,终于来了一次有点总结性的考试——期中考试。在考数学的时候,由于动作过慢,导致了试卷写不完,然后匆匆忙忙地乱写下答案。由于水平没有发挥完,所以才得了102分。班主任在总结考试时说:“发挥失常的同学,自我总结一下为什么会发挥失常。”然后我自我总结了一下,发现了原因:由于刚开考试过分自信,所以导致动作过慢,引起发挥失常。

初一生活见闻感受

宾桂清

转眼间,初一生活接近尾声了。回首望去,其中的酸甜苦辣、欢歌笑语、探索思考,一点点、一件件,历历在目,让我难以忘怀。截取三两幅画面,来纪念即将逝去的初一生活。

一、诵读赛场的对比

刚上初一不久,学校举行“中华经典诵读比赛”。我班全体同学苦练两个星期,信心百倍走上舞台。在比赛中,我班同学精神振奋,声音整齐洪亮,台下观众们的交口称赞,评委们的点评是:整齐响亮,内容很有意义。另一个班的朗诵内容和我们的一模一样,但是在舞台上,他们的同学读得乱七八糟,还有人打打闹闹。班长说:“他们真不团结!”

同一个节目,差距怎么这样大?原因是他们班的同学不团结,态度不端正。俗话说“团结就是力量”,不论做什么事,团队的合作精神是取得成功的重要保证。

二、同学,别插队

“排好队,别插队。”饭堂的阿姨还没有说完,我的眼前又晃过一道人影。一位高年级的女同学旁若无人地走上前,挤进了一位初一小个子同学的前面,大屁股左右一摆,小个子同学不由得后退一步。望着高大的背影,小同学哑巴吃黄连一样,有苦说不出。

同学呀,老师们反复说过“打饭要排队”,可你就是不听。要知道一个人的文明修养的好坏体现在他日常生活的言行举止之中。“勿以恶小而为之,勿以善小而不为。”我们要在点点滴

滴的小事中体现自己良好的文明素质。

三、做事谨慎为妙

在第二学期段考中,我的数学成绩才得102分,不应该呀。班主任在总结段考时说:“发挥失常的同学,自我总结一下,原因在哪里?”我把数学考试仔细总结一下,认为原因在于刚刚考试的时候过分自信,总以为小菜一碟,全部搞掂没问题。所以解题斯条慢理,老师通报最后15分钟的时候,才惊觉还有不少题没有写,

虽然不能低估自己,但也不能高估自己 ,凡事都要以平常心对待。

(主体部分评价:主体内容选材具体,角度不同,从团队精神,日常生活的修养和学习上要注意细节等三方面来写初一的见闻感受,内容充实,并且议论能够紧扣事例进行,从感悟来看,自己的思想在初一阶段确实得到提高了。

不足之处是:

一是小标题不够具体。

二是三个内容都是叙述,写法单一。 三是第三个内容叙述啰嗦一点。)

在整个初一中,一切的一切都给我很深的感受。它让我有了团结心,提高了我自身的修养,还端正了我的态度。(字数708字)

(评:结尾总结全文,呼应了开头。但缺点和开头一样,缺少文采。)

匆忙答题,结果自然是忙里出错,发挥失常。

盲目自大会拖自己的后腿,我算是得过教训了。日后做事要认真对待,谨慎为妙,“细节决定成败”就是这个道理。

有人说“往事如烟似梦。”可是对我来说,初一的生活不是烟,不是梦,而是录制好的电影藏在我的脑海深处,让我看清楚我曾经跌倒和前进的踪迹,走过了初一,经受了风雨,我们以后的脚步会越来越坚实。(字数838字)

评:修改后的文章的特点,一是开头点出初一生活让人难忘,结尾写初一生活对日后人生之路的影响,首尾呼应,又增加了文采,用到修辞手法,长句和三字四字的短句相结合,使句式结构灵活。

二是主体三个内容,第一、第三个内容以叙述加议论为主,第二个内容以片段描写加议论为主,这样写法多样,有详有略。修改后的语句条理更清楚,逻辑性更强。

三是修改了一些语法错误。如《中华经典诵读》,不能用书名号。

篇三:《作文修改符号》

作文批改符号

作文批改是学生作文能力培养的目标之一,可是,我们应该注意到,学生不能判断自己作文的优缺点,如何进步,如何提高。教师在学生作文本上的圈圈点点,有几个学生会认真去看或看得懂?在现行教材中,也找不到关于学生作文批改能力的专项训练点,学生从课本上找不到批改的方法。而批改的方法与格式,广大教师也是各有千秋。笔者认为,时下最紧要的是:语文教学界要统一作文批改的符号, 让师生真正重视并规范作文批改行为。作文评点报上使用的作文批{初一(改变自已)作文}.

改符号值得推广,现摘录如下。

1、删除号:用来删除字、标点符号、词、短语及长句或段落。

2、恢复号:又称保留号,用于恢复被删除的文字或符号。如果恢复多个文字,最好每个要恢复的字下面标上恢复号。

3、对调号:用于相临的字、词或短句调换位置。

4、改正号:把错误的文字或符号更正为正确的。

5、增添号:在文字或句、段间增添新的文字或符号。

6、重点号:专用于赞美写得好的词、句。

7、提示号:专用于有问题的字、词、句、段,提示作者自行分析错误并改正。

8、调遣号:用于远距离调移字、标点符号、词、句、段。

9、起段号:把一段文字分成两段,表示另起一段。

10、并段号:把下段文字接在上文后,表示不应该分段。

11、缩位号:把一行的顶格文字缩两格,表示另起段,文字顺延后移。

12.、前移号:文字前移或顶格。

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另外:

1981年12月,我国发布了中华人民共和国专业校准GBI一81《校对符号及其用法》。该标准规定的符号共有22种,常用的有以下9种。

删除号是删去字、词、句的符号。第一个符合用于删去句、段;第二个用于删去数字、词或标点符号。

调位号是调整字、词、句次序的符号。第一个和第二个符号用于个别字或少数字的调位;第三个符号用于大段或隔行的调位,箭头插在移入位置。

增补号是增补字、词、句的符号,一般用在需要增补的字、词、句的上方。第一个符号用于增补个别字;第二个符号用于增补几个字;第三个符号用于增补较多的字数。

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提行号是另起一段的符号。把原来一段的文字分成两段;在需要分段的地方标示,竖线画在起段后的位置上。

压行号是降格缩行的符号,用于表示字行退后。{初一(改变自已)作文}.

复原号表示恢复已删文字的符号。第一符号标在需要复原的文字下方;第二符合用于复原大段文字,符号标在已删部位的四角。

7.离空号:##

离空号是表示空行、空格的符号。标在需要离空的位置上,空一字距用#表示,空二字距用##算表示。

连续号是把两处连接在一起的符号,用于需要连接的地方,箭头指向连接处。

9.空行号:>、<

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篇四:《学生相互批改作文的步骤及要求》{初一(改变自已)作文}.

学生相互批改作文的步骤及要求{初一(改变自已)作文}.

七年级上半期

1:格式是否正确。刚入手时,从格式的批改开始。学生打开作文一看正确,便拿出红笔写上批语:格式正确。如发现格式错误,做上记号,做好旁注。 2:卷面是否整洁。这一项批改内容又是绝大部分的学生都能看得出来。如有写字潦草、卷面不整洁的同学在批改别的同学作文中指出卷面不整洁时,自己也受到了教育,下次自己在写作文时也会注意到这一方面的问题了。

3:找错别字、词。批改作文时要将错字、词在原处用上替换符号进行修改,并且写到批语处。考虑到有的学生能力较差挑不出错字、词,我们可以采用三、四个为一组,轮流交换批改(每位学生必备一本字典或词典以便批改时查阅)。 4:找出病句。找出一篇作文中的病句。凡是病句都要在句子下面画上横线,写出病因,提出修改建议。

5;标点符号的订正。批改是强调句号、引号、问号、感叹号的使用,并做好修改和订正。

(注:批改时一定要认真,每一篇文章由组内的至少两个同学改,第一个和第二个的不一样,多或者差一个就相应的写100字的说明,为什么会出现这样的错误。)

以上5条都是写作文的基本的要求。学生经过两三次的批改训练就能很快的掌握方法,也知道批改作文并不难,体会到批改作文的乐趣。在学生熟练掌握以上5种方法和有了乐趣和信心之后,教师应趁热打铁立刻过度到以下几种方法的训练。

6:看作文的选材。作文的选材是否符合习作题目的要求,也就是是否围绕中心选材。

7:从读中赏美,看作文能否运用已学过的修辞手法和表达方式。批改过程中用符号标出,写上佳句品析的体会。

8:看作文的中心内容是否鲜明、集中。

9:互写批改小结(评语)。重点写习作的优点和及鼓励性评语(要求要具体,每篇评语不少于200字)。

篇五:《语文–提高初一学生自主批改作文能力的研究》

小课题研究申报表

篇六:《《初中作文生生互改》教学设计》

《初中作文生生互评》教学设计{初一(改变自已)作文}.

毕银丽

教学目标:

1. 学习写作文评析,培养学生的写作和阅读欣赏美文兴趣。 2. 学习评改作文的方法,通过评改作文逐步提高学生的写作能力。

3.以“作文等级评分标准”为指南,引导学生全方位评改作文; 教学重难点:

以“作文等级评分标准”为指南,指导学生评改作文,引导学生全方位评改作文,通过评改作文逐步提高学生的写作能力。 教学准备:课件制作;教师将所有的作文看一遍;给学生讲清楚生生互评作文的规则。 教学流程: 一、导入新课

同学们,我们的作文经常多数是“师评”,少数由班级作文评改小组“互评”,在这个过程中,我尝试了一些具体做法,也获得了一些有益的启示。今天呢,让我们一起走进“作文生生互评活动”中来。

板书课题——初中作文生生互评 二、教学步骤

(1)学生读同学的习作,默读、轻声读都可以,圈点勾画,圈出错别字。(3分钟左右)

(2)教师幻灯片出示“作文等级评分标准”(50分){初一(改变自已)作文}.

c. d. e.调位号: ∽ f.留空号 ∧

g.错别字 ㊣ h.优美句子﹏ ﹏ ﹏ i.句子不通 →← j.用词准确好词语 „„ (4) 教师出示幻灯片作文评改要注意

(作文评改“十查表”)

一查观点是否正确; 二查中心是否突出; 三查内容是否充实; 四查扣题是否紧密; 五查字词是否确切; 六查句子是否通顺; 七查详略是否恰当; 八查结构是否完整; 九查文笔是否精炼; 十查标点是否准确。

(5)学生依据评分标准灵活使用批改符号开始作文互评,要求写眉批、旁批和评改心得并量分。(教师穿插在学生中间,一边指导学生互评,一边观察互评情况。教师规定互改的时间是30分钟,一人改完一本作文后传到下一人手中,下一人继续改,遇到自己的作文可以自改,遇到已经改过的作文,再传到下一个同学手里,也可以和别人的评语交流意见。写尾批时学生要注意:第一行顶格写“互评”两个字,第二行起空两格写评语,评语后打分,最后,右下面用非红色的笔书写批改人姓名。就这样以此类推“互互评”“互互互评”) (6)教师指导优生关注发展等级分,力图从“有创意”这方面有所突破;指导中等生从“较深刻”“较丰富”“较有文采”这几方面有所突破;指导学困生关注“基本等级分”,力求达到二等(这个等级里包括及格作文)

(7)老师面对面的辅导学困生。

[注意:对学困生的辅导不能面面俱到,要追求课堂效益,辅导重点在“审题是否准确、中心是否明确、结构是否完整、语言是否通顺、字迹是否清楚”]

( 8 )交流:学生推荐习作,要求说出推荐理由。

(9)展示:将学生在改作过程中发现的好文章进行全班交流展示。 (10)推选优秀评改人。标准是:态度认真;量分恰当;评语具有建设性;心得体会有真情实感;修改的地方针对性强,比原作有明显的提升。 三、课堂小结

说说全班原作文的大体情况,表扬进步习作和优秀习作,提醒极个别的同学评改随意有应付了事之嫌,还可以提醒某些同学量分过高却说不出打高分的理由。

四、布置作业

请以“我的朋友”为题,写一篇不少于600字的作文。要求学生根据本节课所学到的知识,为自己的习作写自评。

篇七:《初一英语作文(教学个人珍藏版)》

初一英语作文:我想成为一名科学家(英汉)

I really want to be a scientist. I think the scientist is the best job for me. A good scientist can make the world change a lot. If I become a scientist, I will make the desert be covered with green trees and grasses, make the war never take places and so on. Now, although I am only a middle school student, I am interested in math and physics. Maybe I have a little of creativity. I will study science harder and harder. I believe that "There is a will, there is a way! "(约100字)

参考翻译: 我真想成为一名科学家.我认为这位科学家是世界上最好的工作.一个好的科学家能使世界改变了很多.如果我成为一名科学家,我要使沙漠是用绿色的树和草人种之间的战争,从不带场所等.现在,虽然我只是一名中学生,我感兴趣的学生在数学和物理.也许我有一点点创造力.我要学习科学越来越难了.我相信“有志者事竟成!"

Mother's Love

I got up late this morning and went to school without feeding my cats.When I came home in the afternoon, the cats almost starved to death. They circled around me and crying for food. I took one fish out and threw it to the cats.I wanted to see who was the first one to catch the fish.Mother cat held it in her mouth and run away quickly. She didn’t eat it, but put it down, then called her children there. The four starving little cats began to devour the fish, but their mother just stayed there looking at them tenderly,without eating a little bit. On seeing that, I thought of my mother. She often does everything for me selflessly. This is a mother’s love, I think.

Father's Love

Mother’s love wins people’s praises for its selflessness. In fact, father’s love is as great as that. They bury their love in the deep bottom of their hearts and will never show it. My father is of this kind. I remembered once I felt ill. Mother wasn’t at home at that moment. Father acted as a father and as a mother as well. When he came home from work, he would cook dinner for me first. The way he fed me made me think of my kind and tender mother. His eyes were full of love and expectation. I did feel a father’s love at that time.

描述你家乡的气候(命题作文)

My country has all four seasons: winter, spring, summer and fall. We girls wear different clothes in each season. It's very cold in winter, so we need heavy sweaters and wool skirts. We like spring.We take off our heavy coats and sweaters then. In spring we wear light(单薄的)skirts.The weather often changes in spring. It's not too hot and it's not too cold. In summer we put on light clothing. We need cool clothing. The weather doesn't change much. It's always hot. It's cool in fall. The weather often changes. Girls wear light coats and sweaters them.

Every season is nice. I like them all.(约100字)

我最崇拜的人

The person I admire

When I was in high school, there was a teacher who taught me more than that in class.He was a very kind boy, 4 or 5 years older than us and taught us geography. We all liked to take his class, though geography was not our major course.What impressed me a lot was his grace.You could see him always smiling. He got angry only when we were too noisy in class.After class,he often played soccer with us.He used to be a very believable defender and never fouled on any of us.We all liked to call him "Teacher Miao" and he was just like a friend, not a teacher.His sonsy personality inspired me to be kind to everyone I met.That was my well-beloved "Teacher Miao" .(约120字)

My classmate

Liu Kai is my classmate. He is a good student and always ready to help others.

One day on his way to school,he saw a little girl crossing the road. A car was coming towards her quickly and the girl was too frightened to move. The car nearly hit her. Just then LiuKai rushed up to her and caught her by the arm. The little girl was saved. She told him where she lived,and he took her home. When LiuKai hurried into the classroom,the teacher had already begun his lesson. He told the teacher why he was late. He was then praised for what he had done.(约105字)

My home town

My home town isevery beautiful. it stands beside a wide river and is rich in fish and rice.

But in the old days it was a poor and backward little town. many people had no work. they lived a hard life.

In 1949 my hometown was liberated. since then great changes have taken place there. the streets have been widened. factories, schools, hospitals, cinemas and theatres have sprung up one after another. the life of the people is greatly improved.

I love my hometown. all the more i love its people. they are working hard so as to make it still richer and more beautiful.(约100字)

Visiting My Friend

This afternoon I went to see my friend Liu Ying. She has been ill for three days and this morning she felt even worse, so her father took her to the hospital. The doctor examined her carefully and said it was nothing serious. She got a common cold,but she had better stay in bed for two or three days. After taking some medicine she felt much better.

Liu Ying looked still worried. She was afraid of missing her lessons. I told her not to worry. I could help her with her lessons.I hope she will be all right and keep up with others.

An English Class

We got the news before the English class that some foreign teachers from a middle school in New York would visit our class. We felt excited and nervous.

The bell rang and the foreign teachers came into the classroom. They spoke to us in English one by one. They spoke English clearly and slowly. A woman teacher came to my desk, with a smile on her face. "Hello! Nice to meet you! "she said friendly. I answered her. Then she asked me some simple questions. We talked With each other for a while. "Your English is very good,"she said. I thanked her and felt very happy. Then I decided to study English harder than before.

用进行时态描写的短文

It is Sunday. The Turners are free and they are staying at home .They are ding different kinds of things. Mr Turner is mending his car. Mrs Turener is sitting at the table . She is drinking. Bob is talking on the phone . Nancy is sitting near the pool. She is watching the dog swimming. They are having a good time .

用进行时态描写星期天

It is a fine Sunday. There are many people in the park. They are playing happily (高兴地). Some are playing beach volleyball on the beach .A man is lying on the chair .A man

is swimming .He can swim very well. A man is talking with him .He is learning from him (向他学习游泳).Everyone is having a good time .

Cars or Bikes?

题目:有人选择骑自行车上学/班,有人选择开/坐私家车上学/班。你觉得哪种出行方式更好? 为什么?

Cars or Bikes?

Cars and bicycles are similar in that they are both privately owned means of transport. In other words, they have in common the fact that the owner can decide when and where to go. However, there are a lot of difference between them.

A car costs a lot more to buy than a bicycle.

In addition, it is far more expensive to run. For example, a car has to be insured, and must be serviced regularly; furthermore, spare parts for a car cost a lot of money. A ear uses petrol, which is expensive, whereas a bicycle uses only human energy.

On the other hand, as far as comfort is concerned, a car is better than a bicycle. In a car you are protected from the weather, have comfortable seats and plenty of room to can? people and luggage. A car is not only more comfortable than a bicycle, but it is faster as well. With respect to convenience, it is difficult to say which one is better. A bicycle is certainly easier to park! To sum up, each one has its advantages and disadvantages.(约180字)

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