I used to have many dreams. As I grow up, Istill haveso many dreams. Every dream makes me change.
When I was six years old, I dreamed to be a student. This dream made me change a lot. I studied hard and I did more homework to be a student.
But when Ibecamea student, I wanted to be a writer because I love writingso much.Being a writermeans more and more people will readmypassages andIcan sharemyideas with everyone. Well, it alsomakesyou keep calm andhelp me become wiser.
Now, Iam dreamingto be a kid because I want to stay with my parents more often. Maybe this dream is very strange. But when I grow up, I findIhave lostlots of amazing feelings ofbeing a kid. Iam dreamingto be a kid. It means I can play with parents andspend more with them. This dream makes me change. I think I must study hard to make my parents not work so hard. Theyhave donea lot forme and my sister.
I hope tobecome a kid again and stay with my parents more time. The dream makes me knowthehardshipsof my parents. And Ihave changedbecause ofthisdream.
修改后:
I used to have many dreams. As I grow up, my dreams change a lot.
Before I went to school, I dreamedof becoming a student. But when Ibecamea student, I wanted to be a writer because I love writingso much.Being a writermeans more and more people will readmypassages andIcan sharemyideas with everyone. Well, it can alsohelp me become wiser.
Now, Iam dreamingof becoming a kid. Maybe this dream is very strange. Butas I grow up, I findIhave lostlots of amazing feelings of being a kid.If I were a little kid again, I could play with parents andspend more with them.
This dream makes me change, too. I think I must study hard to make my parents not to work so hard. Theyhave donetoo much forme and my sister.
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