This weekend ,I had a lot of fun.I got up at seven fifteen. I brushed my teeth and had some breakfast.Then,I went to the park with my good friends. We had a picnic there. We brought some apples,some mangoes,some sandwiches and some juice.The apples and the mangoes were sweet. The sandwiches were delicious. The juice was nice. After lunch, we began playing games. We also played table tennis. We all happly.I had a good weekend, what about you?
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I had a lot of fun this weekend.
I got up at seven fifteen. I brushed my teeth and had some food for breakfast. Then,I went to the park with my good friends. We had a picnic there. We brought some apples,some mangoes,some sandwiches and some juice.The apples and the mangoes were sweet. The sandwiches were delicious. The juice was nice. After lunch, we began playing games. We also played table tennis. We were all happy.
I had a good weekend, what about you?
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